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    dots Submission Name: Haiku 2dots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    dotsHaiku 2dots

    Hey there little one
    There is your intricate nest
    Inside my mesh heart.

    Submitted on 2008-08-16 17:09:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this haiku muchly..

    yes, the nature thing is there, but a deeper meaning about love and caring for another...

    very nice..

    and really nice to read a fellow illinois poet.

    | Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Not much to say other than i liked it. Haikus are always good when they accomplish a lot within those few lines, and you did well at that with this. Just has an eternally sweet feeling to it, it's nice. Well tried to expound as much as i could, hard for me to say a lot about a haiku :)
    | Posted on 2008-08-17 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]

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