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High Summer Low Down

Author: bananers
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High Summer Low Down

That sun is white, and that road long
Just can't remember where I came from.
All I know, is where I'll go-
Goin' down that road gonna take it slow.

That moon is high, on top the hill
Just beyond that cotton mill.
But there's no room for Jack or Jill,
Cause I think I might be getting ill.

That mountain's risin' right at me
I count clouds rollin', one two three
I should have never left Tennessee
On my way to beat the bourgeoisie.

That grass so green, a chromic sheen
That dew flows down, a foam so clean
I don't want to see that factory steam
Let us cultivate that Carsonic dream.

Submitted on 2008-08-16 18:41:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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