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Glacier's Point

Author: Bozly
Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 20 /30 /36
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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This poem came to my mind by random. It may not make sense. But I felt the beauty when I wrote it.

Glacier's Point

Dancing in the sky
Among diamond dust
to the heaven's we wait

Each day.
We skip along the icy skies
Dancing with the specters of old times
Trails of sickles are left behind!

To the point of destiny our wrists flicker
To the point of blazing auras our souls enlarge

Tomorrow spans into the waking hills
The moon spiteful and shrill.

Submitted on 2008-08-17 19:33:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I agree with Venia, a very beautiful piece. The imagery is very surreal, you create the sense of almost being in some magical dream. So good job, I enjoyed reading it.
| Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this. It doesn't need to make sense at all to be a perfectly fine poem. I took a poetry class with a woman named Janee Baugher, and when I told her how sick I was of explaining that my writing means nothing to people, she said "You tell them that poetry is not for understanding." You words are beautiful. I can see this glacier perfectly in my mind, and that's all that really matters.

| Posted on 2008-08-18 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]

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