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    dots Submission Name: Willow’s weepingdots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWillow’s weepingdots
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    Deep whispers from the hollow trees,
    A weeping willow of what longed to be.
    A melody of tattered sheets;
    Blessings like a child’s dream,
    Cats all but purring, licking cream,
    And a deserts waste land of what longed to be.
    Drinking stars from chocolate skies,
    Deep dark ashes, love’s first cry.
    And all the while asking to die.
    Windows on the leaky rain,
    Tattered from the pulling picture frame,
    And all the while crisscrossed high,
    Child dream’s asking ‘why?’
    Deep whispers from a lullaby,
    Creaming cats wishing to hide,
    Whispers from the hollow trees,
    Distant like o’Hallow’s eve,
    All the while dreams of High, a whisper
    Asking, wondering, why.
    A deep whisper from the hollow trees,
    Weeping willows of what longed to be.







    Submitted on 2008-08-18 00:12:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      how hilarious! it is as dark as the inside of a coffin on a moonless night! it makes me laugh. hahahaha.. whoo... good stuff. keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2008-08-20 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]


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