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    dots Submission Name: Stolen Rhythmdots
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    Author: FallenGrace
    ASL Info:    29 already?/m/ga
    Elite Ratio:    5.67 - 360/375/90
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStolen Rhythmdots
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    Burning my atmosphere
    with little forms of mischief
    poisons and their surrogates
    are knocking down my door.
    Easing my grip on them
    I open up and let them in
    take the spill, the mother’s pill
    and slip into a free falling.

    Cursing my loneliness
    with spirits that abhor you
    slinking back to silliness
    and friendships made in haste.
    We are the invalids
    the barely thinking thespians
    playing coy for all the world
    in hopes that they will someday see.

    Writing a manifest
    of all the tiny thoughts I’ve
    stolen, pilfered, robbed from you
    and rethought as my own.
    Speaking in metaphor
    a tattered rug on crystal floor
    there is no philosophy,
    no knowledge that will set you free.




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      Though we run in haste to capture all the minglings,the trapestries of others blowing like lids of trashcans to the yard of our trickled time. there be no true capture of the synphony rehearsing for concert within our soul. Although we can take a note here, a note there, a bar from tune, it remains as stolen justaposition if the jumbled tune can not convey what truly lurks within our soul.
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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