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    dots Submission Name: overcast.dots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 571
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1378



    Description:
       about: our mortality.

    feedback: all feedback welcome.


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    dotsovercast.dots
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    iím afraid these ocean promises are best intention schemes
    when sins are much higher than the deepest seas
    and the truest compass is only happenstance
    when icarus failures have led me so far off the map
    words stained in a thousand books exposed
    when the east doesnít meet the west Ė they explode
    a sinnerís regret; shallow next to a new way home
    razorblade conviction meets the sweetest sacrafice

    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end

    nervous hands shaking with knuckles white as snow
    when december is a welcome break from the harshest cold
    and donít you remember when life was not the living dead
    when salvation takes on the shape of a bullet
    these are the worst, the best, the most honest words youíve said
    when the blackest skies consume and you steal your final breath
    a sinnerís story; pages ripped out and committed to heart
    heavy souls part ways with the cleverest of disguise

    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end

    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end
    this beginning has an end




    Submitted on 2008-08-18 20:49:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hm. This poem is pretty deep. I believe it has to do with struggles and getting nowhere. such as the ending of life. All lives have an end and what not. It seems to weigh heavily on you like chains. It makes me laugh. Quite hilarious actually. nice work.
    | Posted on 2008-08-20 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]


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