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Hold You

Author: Maskannai
ASL Info:    28/Female/Utah
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Words: 34
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Something I wrote for the baby I am currently twelve weeks pregnant with.. I will be adding more to it as I progress in my pregnancy..

Hold You

Little darling,
how tiny you are
your small body still developing
inside the warmth of my womb

Little sweetheart,
how precious you are
your tiny hands and feet
so clear on the ultrasound

Submitted on 2008-08-19 02:34:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  congrats on the baby. I thought that this was really sweet and simple. enjoy your pregnancy
| Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww thats all I have to say...I will keep looking to see what new stanzas you have added to this poem.
| Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]

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