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    dots Submission Name: Hold Youdots
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    Author: Maskannai
    ASL Info:    28/Female/Utah
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 214/184/78
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 534
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 243



    Description:
       Something I wrote for the baby I am currently twelve weeks pregnant with.. I will be adding more to it as I progress in my pregnancy..


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    dotsHold Youdots
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    Little darling,
    how tiny you are
    your small body still developing
    inside the warmth of my womb

    Little sweetheart,
    how precious you are
    your tiny hands and feet
    so clear on the ultrasound




    Submitted on 2008-08-19 02:34:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      congrats on the baby. I thought that this was really sweet and simple. enjoy your pregnancy
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww thats all I have to say...I will keep looking to see what new stanzas you have added to this poem.
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]


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