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    dots Submission Name: Calmness before the stormdots
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    Author: zercool13
    ASL Info:    18/m/pa
    Elite Ratio:    1.36 - 6/6/13
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 149
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       just one of those when you can tell that thing are going to go horribly wrong


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    dotsCalmness before the stormdots
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    I'm preparing myself for the pain
    that is soon to strike
    it is like the calmness before the storm
    and nothing feels right

    so with the calmness before the storm
    i stand sighlently in place
    waiting for the worst
    that is going to hit this place

    is like daggers flying
    and knives slicing
    it is what i expected
    but hurts even more

    i tried my best to guard myself
    with the armor i put on
    but you took it all away
    in the calmness before the storm

    so as the rain falls on me
    showing how i feel inside
    all i can do is sit here
    and cry, cry ,cry




    Submitted on 2008-08-19 17:26:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You describe such a vivid description of pain and depression that by the end I was really starting to worry about you
    If this is a true feeling of your own life Please try to find the Positives and let them carry you through the Negatives
    I agree this was jumbled in places but to be Honest I also feel that when this became jumbled you were feeling incredibly sad
    I may be wrong here but I almost feel like there was tears falling when you wrote this
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    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      well.... the flow in the beginning caught me but then i lost it after the first 2 stanzas. you should work on the rhythm.
    | Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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