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    dots Submission Name: On Journey Minedots

    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       A sonnet about life and faith.

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    dotsOn Journey Minedots

    When I, at last, with limbs too weak
    to bear once more my burdensí bite,
    no longer cast a shadowed-streak

    across the path, which shed the light
    and drew me from this debtorsí cell;
    as fuel in flame I shall ignite

    in spring-launch forth from empty shell,
    through brokenness and narrow strait,
    in witness of the truth to tell.

    For I was caught and none too late;
    a fisherman had cast his line,
    and pulled me forth through longest wait;

    still reeling, we may yet opine
    great joy both shared on journey mine.

    The Gadfly

    Submitted on 2008-08-21 10:43:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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