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    Author: essence of life
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    as theclock ticks life away the world spins and fates net of lies. i look around and see our world. asit crumbles and dies. some ppl cant stand seeing the world die. i cant stand seeing them hopelessly try. failing is something we all see. but when u fail at something u couldnt stop then u just wasted urtime. well i see ppl trying toosave a life. from miles away they try. as time counts down were barely holding on. i commendthem on there efforts but i lost all hope in saveing this world. butas i see them try so hard no miss illed thoughts come into mind. these ppl try and challenge the fates with there words brave and loud they cut the nets used too trap the victims of fates. they use a hopeful plan most wouldbelieve would fail easy. with cunning and hope this team combines there talents too protect a family from the stillness of frozen time and endless and ever flowing hate. alone they save the sweet sadness. The sweetest of the sad lays awake wondering where she went wrong the hate that lie beside her she couldn't help but love. She had to get away Yet she couldn't leave her soul behind. She thought as alittle of her drifted away slowly with ever second.Her heart broke with ever glance, every memory.Every lost chance she had to escape.She held on, believe it would get better.Believing it would change.










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