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    dots Submission Name: Love, Simply.dots
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    Author: CourtneyLynne
    ASL Info:    23/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 74/70/56
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove, Simply.dots
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    cannon shots out to the sky
    breaking the dawn in two,
    stepping out to greet the day
    only us, just me and you.
    Taking glances back and forth
    among the crowning dawning waves
    holding on to hearts of heat
    counting all the lives it saves.
    when we laugh or when we cry
    doesn’t matter why or how
    we know that in each other’s eyes
    we’ll see the love we both feel now.
    even lonely days of gray,
    when our hearts are parted ways
    we both know that in our souls
    a secret heart that always stays.
    one we traded long ago
    when our love was hot and fresh
    traded straight from lips to heart
    a shock that scorched our flesh.
    although the taste is bittersweet,
    each touch of lips is key
    to radiate the passion from
    you right straight into me.




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      This is a very evocative write and it bit right into my heart as I read it.. The imagery of longing and love is so heated and real and the rhyme is perfect.. I honestly can't think of anything that could be fixed other than adding capitalization after each period..

    May the goddess keep you safe,

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-08-26 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very evocative write and it bit right into my heart as I read it.. The imagery of longing and love is so heated and real and the rhyme is perfect.. I honestly can't think of anything that could be fixed other than adding capitalization after each period..

    May the goddess keep you safe,

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-08-26 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      dude you own
    | Posted on 2008-08-23 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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