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    Author: max
    ASL Info:    27 m tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 152/191/55
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Elixer, by me.


    Elixer

    I'm gonna do this one more time, this

    myriad of dreams and these days are giving

    me nightmares, and I hate it when I sleep.



    For in the trove of cluttered war relics

    and deep down in the boxes of musty

    things, there is a place of tears, too deep.



    Standing alone, all, in the winter with a robe

    and nothing else but hope, looming above

    the computer, a fleeting thought of love

    passed, feel the hours slip through veins

    and fall from one of the times we'd run

    through the streets and down the lanes

    of masters, when we we're gods of creation.



    One thing that must be said is that during

    that winter haven, in the house of necessity,

    there was always one thing on the mind, yearning.

    To give and to recieve from the others in kind

    was a lesson well worth experiencing and learning.




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