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Submission Name: Betrayed dots

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Author:	sapphyreravyn
ASL Info:	17/F/TX
Elite Ratio:	1.34 - 3/17/23
Words:	61

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	384
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	391

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Betrayed dots

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My heart aches
And anger rises.
I cannot blame
She does not know
My Heart aches for him.
I should have known
He'd go to her.
But I was in denial.
I wish they saw
The glint in my eyes
That spark of pain there.
My face will smile
But my eye's always show
I'll always be crying.

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