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    dots Submission Name: Last Nightdots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 542
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 539



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       i wrote this one for someone very special...I just finished talking and i began to write, its like we had a connection has they were writing as well at the same time a beautiful poem


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    dotsLast Nightdots
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    I knew I was going to write,
    Thats how I started.
    From the words you whispered,
    As you departed.
    I accepted you in my heart,
    Before my mind said yes.
    My body is weaken,
    By your smooth and soft caress.
    Thoughts of you could keep me up all night,
    But every thought I had,
    Was made by you right.
    Now I'm off to sleep,
    And I'm so glad to see we're thinking the same.
    Just know that I fell in love with you,
    The first day you came.




    Submitted on 2008-08-23 03:07:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I keep hearing Mya's Fallin' song (fallin' head over heels I'm fallin', in love with you I'm fallin' and I can't get up, don't wanna get up because of love) while reading this. It's nice to see you trying your hand at poetry, showing us that song lyrics aren't your only strong suit, go deh goodas you sell-off (can't seem to get the Jamaican outta me no matter hw far away I move, oh well).

    Keep it cute,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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