Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Last Nightdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 511
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 539



    Description:
       i wrote this one for someone very special...I just finished talking and i began to write, its like we had a connection has they were writing as well at the same time a beautiful poem


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLast Nightdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I knew I was going to write,
    Thats how I started.
    From the words you whispered,
    As you departed.
    I accepted you in my heart,
    Before my mind said yes.
    My body is weaken,
    By your smooth and soft caress.
    Thoughts of you could keep me up all night,
    But every thought I had,
    Was made by you right.
    Now I'm off to sleep,
    And I'm so glad to see we're thinking the same.
    Just know that I fell in love with you,
    The first day you came.




    Submitted on 2008-08-23 03:07:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I keep hearing Mya's Fallin' song (fallin' head over heels I'm fallin', in love with you I'm fallin' and I can't get up, don't wanna get up because of love) while reading this. It's nice to see you trying your hand at poetry, showing us that song lyrics aren't your only strong suit, go deh goodas you sell-off (can't seem to get the Jamaican outta me no matter hw far away I move, oh well).

    Keep it cute,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    164901

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    The World written by jjd
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry