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    dots Submission Name: In View of Utter Griefdots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1347/372
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 99
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 646



    Description:
       A sonnet about grief.


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    dotsIn View of Utter Griefdots
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    Who has not stared in disbelief
    upon the stark and empty chair
    which now, in view of utter grief,

    seems cold and cruel and bitter-bare?
    The open wound cannot congeal,
    left unattended through despair.

    Observe the slightest brush can peel
    and pull upon the closing scar
    regardless of the look or feel.

    This pain, in loss, however far
    removed from tragedy’s dark spree;
    a ship lodged fast upon this spar,

    may yet release from starboard lee
    down tributaries to the sea.




    The Gadfly




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      47 views and no comments?? Tut, tut! Right, I shall give you mine:

    I liked this piece. I thought it was quite original and I liked the language you used. I felt "upon the stark and empty chair" was a nice line.

    The structure puzzled me a little though, it seemed disjointed and didn't flow properly, but perhaps this is a style of writing I'm not familiar with.

    Alex
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]



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