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    dots Submission Name: To my...soulmatedots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 675
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    dotsTo my...soulmatedots
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    Dear ------,

    I know you're out there
    They think you're nowhere
    But like the air, the love is there
    the faith is born, the sign is clear

    Dear -----,

    I know I've seen your face
    So, where are you in this place?
    I felt you in my soul
    I need your miracle
    Why don't we go
    into the light together?
    I'll be your feather, I'll help you fly
    I'll watch you soar, Won't let love die

    Dear ----,
    I know that you exist
    I reminisce, a past life, a first kiss
    before rejuvenation, a declaration upon your lips
    but to the mist you were dismissed

    and here I am now, thinking of you, writing to you ----

    ..where are you -----




    Submitted on 2008-08-24 16:25:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Absolutely beautiful anf full of emotion.. The deep sense of longing you have infused in to this write is so strong it pulled at my heart strings as I am sure it has pulled at the strings of every else who has strayed or will stray across this piece.. Your imagery and rhythm were very good and the piece flowed very nicely..
    Looking forward to reading more in the future and please feel free to check out my stuff as well if you have an extra minute or two..

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-08-24 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Very deep and an extremely emotional piece
    I found this to be sad but Honestly your words also give hope to those who feel this way knowing that the pain can never last forever
    Great Job!!!
    Looking forward to reading more from you in the future
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-08-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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