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    dots Submission Name: how to do nothing when calling in sickdots
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    Author: discombobulated
    ASL Info:    26/m/nz
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 81/63/24
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Sorry
    Total Views: 700
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 870



    Description:
       monday colds suck.
    big-time.
    hack hack.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotshow to do nothing when calling in sickdots
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    an empty coffee mug, a stubbed-out smoke.
    your cough is minimal, your muscles
    wallpaper-thin and huddled
    underneath a blanket.

    take two panadols and ask for sleep.
    read and watch and drink and hope for
    tuesday to be as far away as possible.
    bach and bartok and that thrash metal lineup
    can all go to hell. that che guevara book
    lies closed, a mere seventy-six pages in
    and you'd like to see it burnt toast.
    revolutions were never conducted from bed.
    ideologies were formed out in the pampas,
    the dealing to the sick, the commotion
    and gunsmoke you lack, your head
    a battleground already.

    chin up, young man.
    there's always tomorrow.

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    Submitted on 2008-08-24 22:07:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very interesting and thought provoking.. I especially like how you began with a solid base in reality before bringing in the metaphors, which to me was a great eye grabber that made me want to read more.. Beautiful imagery, though the rhythm of it kind of goes off kilter a little in a few places, but not so badly that it ruined the read..
    | Posted on 2008-08-24 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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