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    dots Submission Name: Wishdots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWishdots
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    Cant be young forever,
    she thought a silent plea.
    She ran up to her room,
    and cried out in misery.

    A few more years,
    till I leave this place.
    She ran her fingers thru her hair,
    willing the tears to streak her face.

    Nolonger did she cry,
    the tears just never fell.
    She probably would never cry,
    even as she fell through hell.

    She must have forgotten,
    on one of those tear filled nights.
    Forgotten to remember,
    after one of her screamless fights.

    To remeber how to cry,
    when her mind overflowed in hate.
    But the knowledge passed her by,
    as she damned herself with fate.

    The only tears that flow,
    pour down like crimson rivers.
    The only ones that show,
    would give everyone elses soul shivers.

    But they are perfect,
    in there vermillion beauty.
    With no negative affect,
    theyre her ultimate release.

    But so hard to hide,
    are her pretty scars.
    She wishes those would just stay inside,
    they make people hate her more.




    Submitted on 2008-08-25 01:35:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. The flow was off here and there and a bit clichè in some places, but it was a great write. Many people can relate to this because cutting is a popular release. Not the best one, but done by so many. It's not hard to figure why since the body release endorphorins when in pain. Many can also relate to the not being able to cry when it seems that it is the right time to cry. I know I've been there, and I know it sucks.
    I hope you get through all your problems and I hope you don't cut too deep. Be careful.
    Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-08-25 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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