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    dots Submission Name: One Nightdots

    Author: MINTPATTY
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/2/7
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOne Nightdots

    One Night
    That's all it takes
    For your heart to bleed out
    After it breaks

    When I close my eyes
    I can still taste your lips
    Feel your touch
    It still makes my heart skip

    I loved you then
    I love you still
    Even though it was
    my blood that was spilled

    I gave it my all
    My all wasn't enough
    You betrayed our love
    Fate betrayed my trust

    I dream of you
    As you were that night
    The passion in you eyes
    Invading my blood stream
    Like a deadly snake bite

    Even though my sanity's
    Holding by a string;
    I wish you both all the happiness
    That this world can bring

    I hope that now, even though what
    We had you blew , with her,
    Forever is more
    than just a word
    as for me
    Perhaps I'll find someone
    that makes me as happy
    As the mere thought of you

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      ...Im crying. Im in such a similar situation. My girlfriend and I were in a open relationship and i slept with my best friend and she faked being pregnant to got me to be hers... I just figured out everything she told me was a lie. Your poem is how I feel.
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by lobisch123 | [ Reply to This ]

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