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    dots Submission Name: Battle of Lifedots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       A descriptive accounting of an internal battle we all face at some time. This can be associated with emotion struggles or a challange one faces in daily life. Mostly it is to help me / we release some of my / our torment of a tumultus life event.

    This is a collaboration between myself and my wife Cleo COllier. Can you see where the two styles change or converge?

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    dotsBattle of Lifedots

    All hail the criers beckon
    A release of cloistered torment
    The waste of battle lifts as the vista lays exposed

    Clairity of mind mimicks the serenity nature paints
    Returning full circle the path begins
    Anew with obtainable horizons

    The bastards head - the monument of relief
    Bears the promise of return should I lower my guard

    Embrace the growth, my learnings entrenched
    A stalwart of saftey begets welcomed optimism
    My ramparts fortified, the caison at ready
    I'm hailed a victor my humility lays exposed

    The great wheel of circumstance moves as the sun's steady arc across the sky
    I feel when the cogs have clicked and the circumstance is again in my favor
    It is then I paint my battle colors

    Purify my intentions, and invite my warrior spirit to fill my soul
    For I know I have already been assured of victory - on a parallel leg I have already won
    In a heartbeat's time I will have my enemy's head, swinging from a grasp of hair, hanging from my clenched fist

    It is only then when I will loose the quelled emotion
    The emotion that screams with such vehemence of victory

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