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    dots Submission Name: This war.dots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 651
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 280



    Description:
       !!NOTE!!-
    Before you read this, please note that it's not going to make much sense and flow well to you because you cant really hear the little jingle ive got in my head. BUT its about a girl who has this friend in the army, and he's been in iraq for a while, he comes back for a week leave and they hang out almost the whole time he's there.


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    dotsThis war.dots
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    and it all comes down to this...
    and if you didnt have to go
    well then id take ya to a show
    and you know when you go
    your gonna be missed
    so if i never see you
    just wanted you to know...
    that ill never forget, when we first kissed.




    Submitted on 2008-08-26 06:09:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i may not be able to pin point your flow but i got one in my head now too. i like the flow. it works. is it a true story? ill pray for him to stay safe.

    Liz
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by informations | [ Reply to This ]
      Firstly, good title. Really. Without the description though, I'll definitely be lost with this piece. Like the simplicity of the expression, as the 'war' may represent both the physical and internal struggles.
    | Posted on 2008-08-27 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]


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