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    dots Submission Name: Picture Perfectdots
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    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 526



    Description:
       I don't care anymore


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    dotsPicture Perfectdots
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    If your body made of canvas
    could hold in all my color sense
    then my brush strokes made in short dances
    would sway over your face
    in lovely crimson paint

    the blacks and blues of her bruises
    will ache
    her whole body for days..

    as many as i've laid awake.

    they'll hang you in a gallery
    centered somewhere in the universe
    by the throat, for critics alike to criticize
    all your needs and imperfections.




    Submitted on 2008-08-26 19:57:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very lucky girl you have written about. the colors are a great way for me to picture her vibrance and her aura. nice job.

    Liz
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by informations | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.
    This is a great writ. I am blown away, the word pictures are very unique
    My favorite part is "If your body made of canvas
    could hold in all my color sense
    then my brush strokes made in short dances
    would sway over your face
    in lovely crimson paint"

    The release of pain into the words is clear, yet they remained structured and clear.
    again, great writ
    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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