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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 291
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 583
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1744



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    i'm a loser from the starting line so whats the point in trying
    i'm a chimera without the goat's head, just a poisoned lion
    a lesson before dying, a sit down with baby mama
    while the black smith sharpens the blade on my suicide katana
    youth in a bubble, till the bubble's popped by pressure
    and the only weather forecast we recieve isn't getting better
    and since the thunderstorms persist, i'll stand outsdie with raised fists
    hoping the crashes will smash glass in my path to slash my wrists
    and this
    is the last song i wrote, the last real song i wrote before i choked, choked my life away and stole the light of day and placed it in a jar
    so you define me but i can't tell you who you are
    and since

    the last song i wrote was for a wrong i've done
    i keep the habit running like a horse on dope
    i hope its the last one
    hoping its the last one
    won't keep it from eating me alive till all that's left is gums

    some, times i wind up in situations where
    i been through some shit and shoulda left the situation there
    but, this ain't the time to blame myself for wrongs not done
    the only wrong here is asking me if i got gums
    i'm done, with all the nitpicking soldiers,
    the gravel under bridges that i been walked over
    and if the soda ain't caffinated, hand it to the lady
    cuz i can deal with bubbles while she dips in that mercades
    while she's familiar with the eighties, the past is her baby
    and she won't let it go cuz she don't believe in wiping changing slates clean




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      mint rhymes dude... flows wickedly the whole way through.
    | Posted on 2008-08-27 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]


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