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    dots Submission Name: Reporting After School To Room 69dots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 185/164/70
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 855
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1405



    Description:
       I figured this might be an interesting way to kick the new school year into gear. Enjoy :-)


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    dotsReporting After School To Room 69dots
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    Amidst all of their joking, and all of their laughter
    You call on my name, and tell me to stay after
    But they don't know what we've both got planned
    Teach me the fundamentals of what it's like to be a man

    Pc:
    Teach me teacher
    Use me like a toy
    Teach me teacher
    Iím just a boy

    C:
    Teacher, teacher
    Use my pen
    Teacher, Teach me again

    I never knew that school could be like this
    You taught me Ďbout desire, and how I should kiss
    Not on the mouth but still on your lips
    As i'm grabbing tight onto your hips

    We all know that one plus one equals two
    Thatís why Iíll add myself inside of you
    Iím a three legged man when I have you on all fours
    Where Iíll have you sweating, and screaming,and begging for more
    Five times a charm when weíre onto six
    Like an addiction this lesson is a primitive fix
    Seven may be heaven but you loved it when I ate
    Out your cherry pie and man it was great
    Nine was from behind and then there was ten
    Iíve had you before and i'll have you again
    Teach me more lessons Ďcause I want an a
    From sunset til sunrise til the first schoolbell rang
    Teach me, teacher, scream out my name
    In room 69 where I got an A....plus....




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      enjoyed reading this, was something fresh and funny. you walked the vulgar line pretty tight but didn't fall. nice rhymes and everything, flowed well and stayed pretty funny throughout. thought it would've been funny if you added a line at the end that just said "Plus" referring to the A grade and also to all the extra knowledge received ya know. funny and creative stuff
    | Posted on 2008-08-27 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]
      well the title got me to read, hahaha glad it did, true genius you got on you man. oh my, gosh thats funny, like semi crying funny. God luck on the school year, hahaha gosh thats funny, originally funny hahaha
    | Posted on 2008-08-27 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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