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    dots Submission Name: Dreamscapedots
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    Author: deadpoet
    ASL Info:    18/f/ Miami, Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 44/66/27
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 378
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just some thoughts put down into words.


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    dotsDreamscapedots
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    Sometimes we find within ourselves
    The ability to see
    The things that are impossible,
    Things that will never be.

    From these imaginings we make
    A certain kind of dream
    Of love, of death, of happiness
    Where things aren't always as they seem.

    In this world of fantasy
    Each person has a place
    Each person has a life, a story
    Each person has a face.

    Our dreams a place of refuge
    A place where we can hide
    Where the world is full of hopelessness
    And we've given up inside.

    So when the world is desolate
    We know what we can find
    A ray of hope and love within
    The dreamscapes of our mind.




    Submitted on 2004-07-06 13:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good. Simple ideas forming a strong message. Hope is always a good thing to write about because people can never get enough encouragment in this dark world. It is just unfortunate that people feel the need to look into their dreams for hope instead of finding it in reality.

    So when the world is desolate
    We know what we can find
    A ray of hope and love within
    The dreamscapes of our mind.

    My opinion is the 2nd line above, "what" should be changed to "that,": (We know that we can find).

    I see you are a new user. That's great! I hope you find a lot of enjoyment here.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really incredible. it conveys such powerful images from emotions, and the wording, flow, rhyme all comes together so well. i don't htink i dislike anything about this poem. the only thing i would change is "Where the world is full of hopelessness" to "When the world is full of hopelessness". it just seems to make more sense that way. but this is just a suggestion, and you have a beautiful poem here. *adds to favorites*
    wlecome to the site, you have some great talent.
    ~Heather
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Hethabell_13 | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you. i've written a few others i'd like you to read.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by deadpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      So when the world is desolate
    We know what we can find
    A ray of hope and love within
    The dreamscapes of our mind.
    these were gread lines and very powerful. great job i really enjoyed the poem. welcome to the site lia
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]



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