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    dots Submission Name: That man in the mirrordots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1154
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 609



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    dotsThat man in the mirrordots
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    he runs away with parts of me,
    stashing them across the state
    pawning them to any taker
    selling them for any rate.

    he rocks the boat when i feel sick
    and makes the reeling worse,
    laughing as i'm vomiting
    he feels like such a curse.

    he fans the flames surrounding me,
    with slow flicks from his cape
    helping it to burn the ropes
    so that I might escape.

    he's evil and i hate him
    with almost all i am,
    but if he hadn't made me meaner
    i'd have fallen for your scam.




    Submitted on 2008-08-27 00:55:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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