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    dots Submission Name: The N(EW)L medots

    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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       I am not sure. I just wrote what I felt, it feels good to be back

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    dotsThe N(EW)L medots

    From birth I've never really felt like me.
    A quiet budding evil hiding behind a veil of civility.
    The cold in my eyes so close the truth.
    Only surpassed by hate, my hearts precious produce.
    Tranquil worlds to me are that of bane.
    When I see love and kindness all I feel is pain.
    There's a monster here, bread and breath by relation.
    This monster's a demon and my soul's true cogitation.
    I embrace this darkness, Its ways feel safe.
    Its aura covers me, touching my minds most intimate place.
    I am this thing where chaos is my peace.
    I commit monumental carnage to satisfy my beast.
    I am the winds of destruction I feed on your misery.
    I am the father of your nightmares and the devil envy.
    You created this fiend. My humanity has already elapsed.
    The foolish who attempt my life will find my blood run black.

    Submitted on 2008-08-27 01:20:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The duality of human life is a great challenge - finding the balance. This brings sadness to me when I read it because it feels like a burden that this person has carried for many years of dysfunction and neglect.

    Feeling any emotion is better than going cold but there also is a beauty to life and "IT" is worth finding in oneself.

    Very honest and raw piece.

    I noticed you are a soldier - I was in the Army and know about being a soldier of life too

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This my Friend is one INCREDIBLE write
    You are letting out all the raw emotion that has built up inside of you for far too long
    Dont be afraid to let it ALL out because once its out it cannot harm or hurt you anymore
    I know exactly what its like to feel this way my Friend as I too was there for a very long time
    Please try and remain Positive and Please keep writing as I Promise you
    I know this as a fact because its one of the reasons I am so Positive today
    I will be Praying for you my Friend
    If you need someone to talk to Please feel free to PM me
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      You're certainly getting in touch with your dark side here... I believe all of us have a dark and light side but we don't always acknowledge it... I love how you portray the dark within you as almost a 'human' in its' own right. Dark is personified and given human attributes and thereby empowering it to become a vital part of your psyche...

    You are at ease with this darkness and don't question it... you are 'one' with it...

    I love the line:

    "I embrace this darkness, Its ways feel safe'

    Very well written!
    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It flowed nicely, very descriptive, but there wasn't alot of detailed emotion. It was great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, first off, welcome back. great raw thing here, that inner demon people got, but you give justice to it, thats hard, good job. however [ sadly ] nothings perfect, cause like some lines seem "choppy" to me, but hey just me
    | Posted on 2008-08-27 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]

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