There's been a lot of really short poems going on here. You could have brought it all together by part one, two, three and all. It could work that way as well. For some reason, everytime i bring out poems one after the other, people are more intimidated to comment on it. But your work is worth the time and i do admire how you took one idea and just plainly said out what it was. No story, no structure, no methaphors. Just the plain truth.
I'd love to say more but my eyes have these tiny spots telling me it's time to go to bed. Sorry i couldn't be more helpful but there's nothing wrong with your words and your thoughts. I admire you taking the step in writing things as they are.
Submission Name: Mountains
