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    dots Submission Name: This Agedots

    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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       This is just one of my ramblings I wrote on one of my long bus journeys.

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    dotsThis Agedots

    When you see the light just peer through the cracks in the darkened sky it just sums up life so much really. I mean we see so much darkness, pain; suffering and fear but do nothing and those few who try get nothing. The world is changing so much that we donít even know what is true or not. Know not who to trust. Know not what is right or wrong. To see so much suffering over so many years but be no change, that canít be right. To see so many appeals but still more and no change how come? You will see something and think it is terrible and shouldnít happen yet you do nothing, your thoughts are other people will deal with it; but no one is. Will you start? Will you care that even if the world was to end tomorrow because of something you could have changed? This world is so fragile and every action can have such a ripple effect that there is no way we know anything for sure. Have we developed Ö gone into this computer age Ö this age of technology Ö age of death? No matter what happens to you what you have done lives on, even if people didnít know. Every action you have made has imprinted this Earth for good or bad.

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      I am speechless my your thoughts of this world and the feelings inside of us. you had such a veiw of the journy that we all travel through to seek what and who we are and how to rid this pain within us. i think that it would be even better if you put it into verses, it would help the words get more feeling to them. your thought, was what a thought should sound like. thank you for posting it for all of us to read. I will treasure it.

    Grimm R.
    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]

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