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    dots Submission Name: You're my owndots

    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsYou're my owndots

    Verse 1

    Words can,
    Can mean so many things.
    Your words mean a million things,
    I need to hear.
    Words can,
    Can describe a feeling,
    But is it the way you feel,
    Cuz thats how it sounds.

    What its like to hold you,
    You feel it when I touch you.


    When I told you that I loved you,
    Are words I meant.
    When I told you that I need you,
    Its the way I felt...
    Cuz I'm listening to your voice,
    Over the phone.
    Everyday I thank the lord that...
    You're my own

    Verse 2

    It sounds like,
    I'm caught in the moment,
    But only you complement,
    This void in me.
    In a second,
    I knew you were meant for me,
    Since your love I've been set free,
    And I can fly away...

    What its like to hold me,
    You always seem to show me.
    Yeah, yeah



    You are my light,
    You maketh me strong.
    You seem to make right,
    All that was wrong.

    Oh oh oh oh...


    Submitted on 2008-08-28 21:13:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think I'm picking up the rhythm you had in mind here, not bad.

    je peux toujours dire que je vous ai observé fleurir,
    Jay (I'm all French now boo boo).
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. The one I love instantly came to mind when I read this.
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by Sparkster | [ Reply to This ]

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