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    dots Submission Name: moth song.dots

    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Riddle/Passion
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    Bytes: 554

       how many different sounds?

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    dotsmoth song.dots

    what this is

    the light humming between cavernous breasts

    overflowing thigh-bone

    like a true gypsy swagger beheld in the slow flicker of time

    it is

    the surge and swell of the earth as a million bodies dance together, designating breath to central fires.

    the fullness of the circle pricks up fawn ears
    bear-eyes surmount to sliding snows
    aurora tips hats.

    wonder sublime,salted eyes matching seas

    zylophone, viola, drum.

    Submitted on 2008-08-28 23:04:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Godthissi great. i'm bias probably. I'd say at least four sounds after all, people dancing enough to shake the earth is noisy. I like the imagery cavernous breasts to me suggested more the space between= cleaveage however worded much better. I haven't been to a drum circle since june they just stopped happening. just work and parkour. i can almost jump the roof of my car now there are foot print shaped dents in my roof to prove it.
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]

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