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    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    20/f/around
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 205/215/100
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I scrub my heart until the
    ink runs like my mascara
    did last night when

    you threw the playbill at
    me and told me that i was
    the better actress, but you
    were the better man. I glared
    at you through the blood
    in my eyes as you recited
    your lies to my face. "I
    want you. I need you." And
    true to your form, your disdain
    was there in black and red
    for all to bleed.

    But it was far too late
    (and not a moment too soon)
    for the play was already cast.

    I am the damsel in recess who
    weaves her clothes and her lies
    on the very same loom. i show
    no surprise when my sentence
    swallows my words. I just watch
    you raise the blade higher and
    higher over my head. Love is
    the misogynist who let you feast
    on my heart as the poet cried
    herself to sleep and the misers
    raked in the mire.

    You plunge your knife into my
    heart to thunder and lightning
    disguised as applause.

    I am still not surprised.




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