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    dots Submission Name: Driftwood (Ft. MC White)dots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 594
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       Alright, so, me and MCW been put this down, it's just a while since i could get a chance to post. excuse, me but i feel like i might have to go back a rewrite my stuff and this whole thing was my idea!

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    dotsDriftwood (Ft. MC White)dots

    Floating gn and out of tides
    riding ebbs and drawbacks,
    my flaws act protective,
    If that's what you'd call that.
    I fall back for a second,
    the direction is changing,
    but all facts aside
    my defenses are waning,
    aiding to another
    no-contest brawl
    yet another stall,
    so the concept awes.
    I yaw with the tide,
    so the ride is smooth.
    when all I have to do is glide,
    well, then i'm fine, I'm cool....

    (MC White)
    But when I fight back
    its like that; world war two
    I lose position and my mission
    is FUBAR too
    the tide rippin me down
    when I try to stand
    try to keep head above water
    and my eyes on land
    Giving in to the pressure
    allows me so much more
    room to move, paths to groove
    but in the end its a boor.
    So give me my chance
    my singular
    my heart to win
    my thing that your
    so closely guarding
    beside your bar drink
    that hand of yours
    drifts just like mine, think
    of all the ways I'm good for you
    then sink with me
    and I'll sync with you

    Submitted on 2008-08-29 18:46:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was a great piece to read. u're are both very skilled in rhyme and flow, making the whole read a pleasure. My favorite thing about it is the transition; that worked so well, adding to both parts. and even though the subjects seems to change, it actually could work as the same as well. great job to both of u!! =]
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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