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    Author: JTrickly
    ASL Info:    23/female/
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 10/4/13
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    Description:
       Just wanting to rest here and there.. wish for more help and understanding...a few random thoughts I go through...and I'm sure at one point or another other people do too...


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    Hopefully some relief
    wake up in the morning..
    thoughts flood my head..
    But I look at my son...
    and I think to myself
    hopefully some relief
    I call my best friend
    in hopes to clear my weary head...
    and as I dial
    I think
    hopefully some relief
    Unfortunately that's not the case
    so I hang up in his face...
    grab my keys
    and say to myself
    hopefully some relief
    I drive around town...
    Look about and arournd
    and notice
    in comparison
    I really truly have some sort of relief...
    things for me aren't as bad as they seem..
    and maybe this is just part of a large plan for me
    But I do wish if just for a moment
    for a second..
    I could all make it stop..
    pause
    just find a bit of relief.




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