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    dots Submission Name: the sadness dots
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    Author: JTrickly
    ASL Info:    23/female/
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 10/4/13
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       My out look on depression and how at times it effects people and their surroundings..


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    dots the sadness dots
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    it moves like a virus
    seeping into your body
    slowly devouring your mentality
    in hopes to engulf your mind
    eventually wanting to conquer you heart...
    tearing your body
    your world
    your temple of peace
    apart...
    Eventually seeping back out again
    becoming contagious
    spreading to others around you
    effecting things you hold dear
    making it hard for others to come near..
    only a few are exempt
    either already contaminated
    or fighting it off the best they can
    praying saying all the positives they can
    hoping never to experience the deep dark shadow
    the sadness




    Submitted on 2008-08-30 18:55:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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