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    dots Submission Name: Just a thoughtdots
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    Author: JTrickly
    ASL Info:    23/female/
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 10/4/13
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 488
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 807



    Description:
       I wrote this shortly after the seperation of myself and my husband. Really want him to get better, and I really want him in our son's life... It's hard...
    And I really want to learn how to love really and truly...


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    dotsJust a thoughtdots
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    ust a thought..
    If you cared so much
    Why did your single touch become a freak accident to my face, my body, and my mind?
    I you miss him so much why you don't show it..
    No Call
    No $how..
    Guess you out blowin it on ya other replacement...
    Just a thought...
    Why can't you come out your shell
    Let someone in
    Let them love you
    let them heal you
    ...make amends
    Just a thought...
    How can you hate what it is that you have become..?
    Avoid it you might
    but think of my trick question
    -just before every fight...
    Just a thought...
    for my self...
    If none else
    think of self...
    If not just the betterment of self
    more so for (ur small) someone else




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