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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: JTrickly
    ASL Info:    23/female/
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 10/4/13
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Something to think about...If you've been through alot, and you just want a little piece of heaven...then you can relate to this poem/ free verse...

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    Why canít I have my cake and eat it too?
    Is it so wrong of him wanting me
    And me wanting you?
    Must we all be politically correct
    Or have a certain bit of adjusted retrospect
    According to society
    I mean who really is society
    A bunch of melting pots
    Meshing things up
    Making a big ass mess for somebody else to clean up
    Or point fingers and do the blame game
    Doesnít all just sound wonderfully insane?
    Why canít we all endulge in our cakes that we make?
    What evere happen to share and share alike?
    I guess because it always ends in a big fight
    Someone is jealous of chocolate
    Everybody is taught to love vanilla
    Somebody done swiped all the Red velvet cake
    Just sayin this shit is a mess to be made...
    But I digress
    Why is it so wrong to just do what you please
    Not everyone is promised Heaven
    So can it really wait?
    I donít know about most but I want a bit of mine right here and right now
    Due to all the levels of Hell Iíve climbed from
    Why canít I have a small cup of
    silky smooth
    Deep toned
    make me moan
    Refreshing as the day he was born
    I guess because everytime I run to the water
    my well dries up...
    Guess itís back to climbing
    before my time is up
    Hope I havenít shorten my place along those pearly gates
    I guess Iíll have to see
    But in the mean time
    Can somebody save some cake and a short glass of water for me?

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