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    dots Submission Name: The god-Machine.dots

    Author: UnspokenDreamer
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 542/753/205
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe god-Machine.dots

    Can you hear the sounds?
    Gears turning, chains pulling, engines combusting...
    It's as if this machine is so simple
    that any passerby could write it's manual.
    I hear it's workmen shouting their claims
    But the people's faces look confused.
    Just down the road a bit,
    it was a different 'three-step method',
    a machine that bears the same name
    yet it wields such a different product.

    "Fire Away!" (clink clink clink, ting ting, tsss)
    The noise and repetition goes on and on...
    I hear the heart of the people
    crying out from afar.
    All at once the workmen bombard them with sales pitches,

    Read my book on:
    "Finding God's Will For Your Life!"
    "Discover God's Secrets to Success!"
    "Find Your Full-Life Now!"
    "God's Weight-Loss Plan"

    And their hearts sink down lower and lower...

    God is not some machine by which you must pull the right levers.

    His heart beats for Genuine Relationship.

    Our hearts were made in His Image.

    Don't go on believing the lies.

    Jesus Is Personal.

    Submitted on 2008-08-31 02:32:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I couldnt agree more my Friend
    If you noticed I have never once tried to convert anyone
    I have ALWAYS believed religion is an extremely personal matter
    Looking forward to reading more from you soon
    This is a little different then your usually style but I have got to admit EXTREMELY refreshing
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2008-08-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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