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    dots Submission Name: Nothing At Alldots
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    Author: ConfusionAngel
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Inside my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 1/2/2
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 741
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsNothing At Alldots
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    Hidden from the world so long
    You've forgotten how to care
    Show that smile you always paste on
    Just ignore the world for what it truly is
    Pretend you know what to do
    If you ever got the chance
    Would you push it to the limit?
    No,you'd believe it isn't true
    Choose the face you wish to use
    For yet another day
    Get up, get up,my little one
    Don't you know it's time to play?
    Slightly monotonous, melancholy, and strange
    How long till you add "homicidal" to your range?
    Close yourself to the world uou know
    Never let your emotions show
    Sorrow is to sadness
    As happiness to joy
    Isn't it ironic?
    The heart's a mere toy
    Relentlessly wander my sweet little doll
    Does it hurt to know?
    You feel nothing at all




    Submitted on 2008-08-31 16:11:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this was written extremely well. I loved it! I knew you could write awesome stories but this blew me off my butt! Grats, Kari!!! Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading. Of course!!!

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    | Posted on 2008-09-03 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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