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    dots Submission Name: A certain vintage typewriterdots
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    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA certain vintage typewriterdots
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    To touch your memory,
    Would mean
    To touch the rotten old keys
    Of a certain vintage typewriter.
    A hidden precious gift,
    Almost pitied by the falling gentle dust,
    That seeks its long-abandoned victims,
    At miserable, God forsaken afternoons.
    A typewriter,
    One of those things I never had,
    Because I was not like
    The nocturnal cigarette man,
    “La femme fatale” with fresh inspiration,
    The writers who occupy a blooming screen.
    A typewriter,
    Once mastered by some awakened writer
    Or by some dull lifeless fingers
    Of a quiet clerk.
    Now,
    Suffocates
    Within its own malicious skin
    The connected vintage box.
    Used, yet not in use.
    For to touch those sympathetic sandy keys
    And rouse the familiar sound
    Of fervent typing
    Would mean
    The return of your memory
    A written intrusion of the past
    Words within ancient black letters.
    Black strong letters,
    Unable to keep quiet,
    Into the night,
    Disturbing the mornings,
    Until, a story is wrought
    Out of dust
    And out of you.













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      wow , how has this not gotten any comments...what a beautiful, haunting piece....

    what i see here is the daughter of someone who was a poet...but passed away...the typewriter passed on to the heir..but not used because there are too many bad memories..

    it may be that the parent was abusive---or neglectful...something hurts too badly and thus this speaker cannot unbox this old typewriter, even though the muse might awaken from the dust that covers it...

    love this piece, Maria

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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