Stuck

Author: Oli ASL Info:    23/F Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206 /211 /53 Words: 19

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Stuck

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In all reality, I know you're here But in actuality, I'm not moving towards you...

Submitted on 2008-09-01 00:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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this could be about a range of subjects. i love how this piece was ultimately left up to the reader's interpretation. being aware and yet so distant is the story of society, culture, religion and many others akin. being out of touch on multiple levels. ill love to leave a better comment, so i'll be checking through your other works. Aerosol

| Posted on 2008-09-01 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]

Strong words Though short to me you are speaking of someone who is afraid of Love or afraid of success and is scared to make a move I myself feel like this constantly so I know of the feeling you are writing of If I were you I would add a little more to this and dont be afraid to add some Honest emotion to explain to the reader just why you feel like this Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You God Bless Ron

| Posted on 2008-09-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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