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    dots Submission Name: Brotherdots
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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 623
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       As the name suggests it was written for one of my brothers he was a little depressed so was supposed to cheer him up a little and let him know I was there.


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    dotsBrotherdots
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    You donít know how much I need you
    You canít see how much I idolise you
    You canít seem to grasp the fact that youíre the greatest
    And helped me out so much

    You were here when my life crashed and burned
    You put your arm around me
    Reached out a hand for help
    Leant me a shoulder to cry on with love and friendship

    I thank you so much for your kindness
    And only wish youíd listen
    And see what you mean to me
    We are the greatest friends
    You watch my life go bad
    Now I watch yours
    Youíre always there no matter what
    And Iím always here for you

    No matter who youíre with you find time for me
    No matter what youíre doing youíd stop
    Just to help me
    And I would do the same for you

    You stick up for me when no one else will
    Youíre here for me when no one else wants to be
    You tell me things will be alright
    Give me words of comfort
    And I shall always do the same for you
    No matter where you go
    No matter how far apart

    Youíre my brother
    And will be forever more
    No matter what
    I love you
    You help me out
    Thank you




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      Thank you ^_^
    I wrote it for my older brother after he helped me when I was feeling down one christmas after a fight with my father over the phone so it is a really special poem to me.
    Thank you again and I am glad you like it.

    ~ <3 ~ Nix ~ <3 ~
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by NixLacus | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem because it describes two of my older brothers. They are always there to help me out, whenever i need it, no matter what it is. Your poem is sharp when it comes to describing the loving bond between sister and brother. I especially love the line "You stick up for me when no one else will" because that is one thing that sibblings do, is stick up for one another often times, when it comes to diffrent sittuations. I know that my older brothers where always sticking up for me when I would get my self into trouble, and they would stick up for me, between them selves.
    I wouldn't change anything in your poem, I would keep it they way it is. Its perfect.
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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