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    dots Submission Name: Dreamerdots
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    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 50/59/41
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 735
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 908



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    dotsDreamerdots
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    For Kael


    I tread lightly on your words, afraid
    to smear the ink, frightened
    of losing my way to you. My feet
    stumble over your anger, my dress
    catching fire. Instantly, I find myself lost
    in an ocean of your sorrow, a deep
    puddle that sits in wait, reflecting
    back to me the person you are. It's then that
    my ears catch the sound of your silence, my lips
    parting to call your name. The stillness
    is a weight upon my tongue, but you
    are the one that bears the burden. Rising
    from the puddle, the fire dashed, my dress
    singed, I start again my tedious walk to
    where you sit upon a stone, the clearing
    of forest about you whispering your
    thoughts in my ear. It's then I look into
    your shining eyes and see...

    End: 8:40pm
    Mon. Sept. 1, 08




    Submitted on 2008-09-02 00:46:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Excellent, mojy. Like I told you on AIM, it simply expresses "me".


    Thank you...
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by Peace_Maker | [ Reply to This ]


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