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    dots Submission Name: the ocean pegasusdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    i've seen the ocean,
    with its pegasus
    lit up across
    a bubble of surface
    asking more questions
    that an a taoist child
    & seeking answers
    that taste
    of the moonlit buttons
    that move... silver in my eye
    where the orange is.

    sometimes
    i make memories
    like honeycombs
    & hide away
    the images
    of those that i've loved
    who've passed.
    & also those whom i've loved
    in passing.
    everything moves
    into everything
    this way.

    could i take
    the colour that you are
    when i see you
    & remember
    how it changed me?
    or how it made the sky
    seem taller for a day
    & all the trees
    that moved past us
    somehow lighter?

    somehow your hands
    become more vivid
    lost in music.

    i'd like to take
    all of the flowers
    of the world
    & convince them to start over,
    slower
    for the benefit
    of gaining insight.
    for you see,
    it is in fact the unfolding petals
    of every season
    that repeat the missing name
    of god
    into the fragrant mystical air
    of always.

    i speak in shadows
    to make light
    of my own.
    & i wonder
    how many times a day
    the time passes?
    i inhale deeply,
    as if to imply
    that structure
    could be regained
    by breathing.
    & i exhale in circles,
    as if to imply
    that love
    could ever find me less
    than wanting...




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