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    dots Submission Name: Remember Me Sweetdots
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    Author: LovelyGoddess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 138/95/104
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsRemember Me Sweetdots
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    We were supposed to survive through any weather
    but since you met her, you claim it's something better.
    You're telling me it's fantasy, now you want me out?
    You said I was your chocolate, the melt in your mouth.

    I can't believe for you I was just someone handy.
    Time that it's over you claim you can't stand me.
    The memories are with us, you would leave this for lust?
    Won't think it over? You would leave me for dust?

    Let me be your candy girl for one last time.
    Remember me sweet, then make up your mind.
    Forget her baby, she is nothing but thought.
    It's back to the basics of what you've been taught.

    Let me give you what you like, you'll like what I give.
    I'll become everything and more, forget her little tricks.
    You wouldn't want another man to have me, right?
    I can keep it together. I've always kept it tight.

    For you, I allow myself to compete in this silly contest.
    I am sweet and delicious. My aura has been blessed.
    If you stay with her then you will continue to regret
    that you didn't chose the candy who tastes the best.

    You can wait and consider things in your own time
    or you can kick back and let my love make up your mind.
    Just kiss me, touch me, treat me right.
    You can always leave tomorrow, don't leave me tonight.

    I'm not a whore, but I can't let you go
    even if it means I have to stoop this low.
    Let me be your candy girl for one last time.
    Remember me sweet, then make up your mind.




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      This was a very nice piece of work. It touched me deaply because it reminded me of a girl desperate to find her love again. With a few rewrites, and fixes of the puncuation and grammar, it would be fantastic. It was not original, it feels as if you used your heart more then anything, and it makes me watch a movie through my head.
    | Posted on 2009-07-17 00:00:00 | by Kykaru | [ Reply to This ]


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