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    dots Submission Name: Everythingdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1148
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1211



    Description:
       To my love, Nazz...


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    dotsEverythingdots
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    You have the most amazing eyes
    That see me instead of just looking through
    And lips that I can't help but touch
    There's nothing quite like kissing you
    Your hands have swept me off my feet
    In both a literal and figurative way
    And your mind never fails to amaze
    You astound me every day
    No-one's perfect and we both fall short
    Of the world's unrelenting bar
    But every moment spent with you, I'm in awe
    Of the wonder that you are
    One look from you and I feel wanted,
    Loved and desired
    And you're the only one I know
    That can both stoke and quench this fire
    I could spend a lifetime walking beside you,
    Fingers intertwined,
    Loving every precious smile
    Marveling that you're mine.
    I knew the moment your lips touched mine
    You were all I was searching for
    I want to belong to no one but you
    Every second, I love you more.
    And when I take stock of all my life,
    Going from here back to the start,
    You're the best thing I've ever known
    And you'll forever possess my heart.




    Submitted on 2008-09-03 05:28:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      again nice styla. it flowed every well i like it.. hes a lucky guy for u to be this in love with him
    | Posted on 2008-09-03 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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