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    dots Submission Name: Don'tdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDon'tdots
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    Don't ask me to stop loving you
    It's a thought I cannot bear.
    You've become the only thing I want,
    The only one for whom I truly care.

    Don't tell me to forget you
    That's something I could never do.
    I've spent my life in confusion
    Now my world revolves around you.

    Don't expect me to stop kissing you
    That's more than I can take.
    The thought of losing your precious love
    Is enough to make me break.

    Don't say that we're not worth it
    You and I are beyond price.
    Without you, I am nothing
    But a heart that's turned to ice.

    Don't tell me that we're ending
    That just can not be.
    Because I can be whatever you need
    And you are the best part of me.




    Submitted on 2008-09-03 12:25:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good write, it has a nice flow. honestly situations like that arent worth changing yourself. ive been there, it doesnt work. you can need and love someone, but rather the truth be told or not you will still live on without them. there is always someone better out there. anywho, overall you did great and i enjoyed the read. thanks

    cris
    | Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was well writen and i like the style u used. im glad to c u are frigthig for what u want. i can feel the emotions u were feeling as u worte this... it was lovely nice work keep it up.


    SickOfHuritng U
    | Posted on 2008-09-03 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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