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    dots Submission Name: Corrupted Blackdots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 577
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    Description:
       Just a lil political piece. I may submit more who knows it IS the fall the only time of year I seem to be able to write.


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    dotsCorrupted Blackdots
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    Starry sky
    Dark of night
    The devil's children have been chosen

    Flawless systems
    Questionable men
    The right is corrupted by greed

    Two brothers
    One to win
    Neither matters, when the time comes.




    Submitted on 2008-09-03 16:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a poem that is the closest to the truth no matter which geographical location, country and type of politics is in question...leaders stand to get the votes...fanatical supporters vote for their leaders usually for no reason what so ever or because of some personal gain (like in the south asian countries)....and the everyday peasant votes with hope in his eyes maybe this ONCE...just maybe...somebody will look towards them...the country and do what they promise and not scurry forward to extend the borders and drink up other's natural resources! proving a point is what seems to be the main thing in the heads of the leaders...be it the president or one of the many candidates in an election...key word here is as "max" here implies...G R E E D!!!!

    greed for power....

    an excellent write up Max esp coz the meaning is so vivid in so few lines...keep it up!
    | Posted on 2008-12-23 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      you ever find that in the US presidential campaigns that no matter who is running against whom, which ever person, you either feel three ways about the candidates?

    1. you hate one extremely.
    2.you totally back one of the guys.
    3. neither of them should be leading a line of kindergartners to the cafeteria much less a country.

    and in the end, whoever gets the most votes, gets placed back into option one.

    We all think he's/she's a moron.

    But you still cant really disrespect the guy, cos well, he's president.

    My gram's is like that. She's completely hate the guy who was voted in, then when he's on teh radio, she'll shush you like its God speaking.

    nice write.

    Ash
    | Posted on 2008-09-13 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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