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Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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close to your heart
that is where i belong
in the midst of the forest growing wild in your eyes
that is where i belong
in the heat of your palms, in the shadows of your temples
that is where i belong
in the rhythm of your breath, in hailing ex haling quietly content
that is where i belong
in the deepest red of your blood, in the tunnels of your veins
that is where i belong
close to your heart
that is where i belong

Submitted on 2008-09-03 22:29:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the way you peiced this together It's reads like two people that are truely in love
| Posted on 2008-09-21 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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