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Author: caspian ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57 Words: 88

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 695 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 497

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close to your heart that is where i belong in the midst of the forest growing wild in your eyes that is where i belong in the heat of your palms, in the shadows of your temples that is where i belong in the rhythm of your breath, in hailing ex haling quietly content that is where i belong in the deepest red of your blood, in the tunnels of your veins that is where i belong close to your heart that is where i belong

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I love the way you peiced this together It's reads like two people that are truely in love

| Posted on 2008-09-21 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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