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    dots Submission Name: Floodgatedots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsFloodgatedots
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    i feel the cracks spidering,
    crawling through my skin
    letting little pieces chip,
    showing the ugliness within

    I'm so scared it's just a gild
    and the goodness wasn't real
    and with every passing day
    the niceness seems to peel.

    there's just so much hate left,
    thoughts i run from even now,
    i beg myself to open up
    but i still can't find out how.

    it comes in little moments
    i'm most giving when in pain,
    when she's been stoking the fire,
    and i'm drenching it in rain.

    In my need to quell the flames
    it all comes rushing out
    the flash flood sweeping everything
    joining rifts caused by the drought

    and as the tide recedes
    the damage tally grows
    another piece just chips away
    and i fear the real me shows.





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